Today in society, people encounter obstacles that are like roadblocks in their paths to achieving success, but we must overcome these hardships, and grow as better, stronger, and more enlightened individuals. The obstacles that we face shape us, and we take the results and lessons we learn from our struggles day to day, conquer them, and move on to the next. Some harsher struggles that we face, we carry with us after we have been defeated or have had the strength to overcome. Humans can face struggles as small as walking around a crack in a sidewalk, to fighting a chronic disease for the rest of your life. We take the baggage with us as we continue, working past everything we face as we climb the mountain of life.
In Ernest Hemingway's novella, The Old Man and the Sea, the old fisherman, Santiago, is no repudiation of this fact of life. Santiago faces hardships that he must overcome to succeed in a once in a life time opportunity to catch his brilliantly audacious fish with its fascinating size, massive strength, and its unyielding fight. The situation he faces is more complex than just him catching a big fish, because in his conquest he faces severe obstacles that he must fight and overcome, and his decisions, and actions of these fights show his true character and the ambition that he possesses.
The first struggle that Santiago faces is the vast sea and his once-in-a-lifetime catch, with merely his own two hands. Manolin, a younger enthusiastic friend of Santiago, offered his assistance, being a benevolent man, Santiago, declined that offer, looking out for what was best for the boy. Santiago being alone really takes a toll on him in being successful in catching his brilliant marlin, and shows how his determination and pride are undeniably great in his fight in this almost impossible situation.
It is evident that Santiago is fully aware of this obstacle, because of the multiple times he speaks about the boy, like when he says "I wish I had the boy" (45). This shows that Santiago knows that if he had assistance, he would have been able to catch his marlin with much more ease and in a calmer manner. The way that he "wishes" he had the boy shows how he almost is almost remorseful with his decision to take on the sea by himself. This feeling then changed when he faced this struggle head on, and continued to fight for his pride and dignity hooked on the end of the line.
The second struggle that Santiago faces in his fight, is the frustrating cramping of his left hand when he was going into his first night at sea. Santiago knows that this is not in his favor to win the battle with his intelligent fish on the line. Santiago speaks to his hand, as though it is not a part of him, and rather an outside being when he says "Cramp then if you want. Make yourself into a claw. It will do no good" (58). The fact that Santiago does this really shows how he knows he must keep himself focused and not let his head get fooled or distracted by things that will stop him from getting his prize. Santiago also treats his hand like an antagonist of his fight. When he says "it will do no good" really represents how nothing can stop him, no matter how hard he must fight, he is not willing to give up on what he has finally earned after 84 strenuous days of no luck and no fish.
Another frustrating struggle that Santiago faces is the deprivations that he encounters. Santiago had a very minute supply of food and water, and was running on a lack of sleep. Santiago faces this struggle in two ways. The first is that he tries not to dwell on the fact that he is slowly dying out at sea, and just focus on his goal. The second way is that he knows that in order to reach his goal, he has to face this obstacle and beat it. This shows how Santiago is not only determined but also wise and cautious in his quest, and knows that in order to reach his goal, he also has to take care of himself.
"It is half a day and a night and now another day and you have not slept. You must devise a way so that you sleep a little if [the marlin] is quiet and steady. If you do not sleep you might become unclear in the head" (77). This exemplifies that Santiago is aware of the situation he is facing, and he also knows that he needs to be proactive about this situation, and do something about it before it is too late and he does not succeed. In the way that Santiago faces these struggles shows that he knows everything he does in his struggle is important, and will affect him in the end of his fight.
The fourth and final struggle that Santiago faces is his encounter with the antagonistic sharks. After Santiago had been successful in reeling the marlin, he had tied it to the side of his skiff, because of its overbearing size. This then attracted scavenging sharks that were looking for a hearty meal and they found it. This challenge that he faced really taught Santiago an important lesson and changed his outlook on his journey.
This taught him that he should have never gone out so far to catch his fish: "I shouldn't have gone out so far, fish" (110). This shows the regret that Santiago now has because he did not overcome this obstacle. The regret that he now had from this situation showed him that he should have thought about everything: the size of the fish, his equipment, the size of the boat, his strength before he took on this great battle. Santiago not overcoming this challenge taught him a lesson, and he will take that lesson with him for the rest of his life with him, and also the regret that he has for not being able to overcome that challenge.
The challenges that Santiago faced in the "Old Man and the Sea" may be different than the struggles that people face in their day to day lives. But, these challenges are similar because they bring out who we truly are and the actions that we take to overcome these obstacles, and the lessons that we learn from them. Santiago faced situations that affected the outcome of his journey, just like the challenges that we face that effect the rest of our lives.
1. The thesis is how we go through struggles everyday. The struggles may be hard, but we do get passed them. We learn from what we do as well.
ReplyDelete2. The quote that supports the lack of food paragraph is best. Not only is the quote good, but you added you tweaked a few weak spots in it to make it stand out. That really spoke to me
3. What works well in the essay is the choice of quotes. The quotes really support the paragraph as I stated earlier. Especially when you fix the quotes to make it work for your paragraph.
4. There's a very big problem with spelling, but I still get what you're trying to say. You're missing a letter or two here and there, but you still manage to get our point across. Good job though.
1.Your thesis is how people go through obstacles and struggles everyday and how to get through it. Your thesis is clear and focused because you used detail and you made great analogies.
ReplyDelete2.The strongest quote that you have is " I shouldn't have gone so far,fish." This quote tells you how Santiago was regretting going to far. This quote stands out because it fits along nicely in your paragraph.
3.Your essay has great reasons that support your thesis.
4.You have a couple of spelling errors every now and then, but that is the only thing I would say is the weakest part.
I. The essay's thesis is that the hardships Santiago faces change him. It is very clear and concise. It's very focused, only talking about Santiago. It engages me because after I read everything about overcoming obstacles I wanted to read about his.
ReplyDeleteII. The third quotation/example is the strongest. I thought it was the best because she explained it very well. It stood out, to me, because of her topic sentence. I liked how she said "antagonistic sharks"
III. I thought the word choice in her essay stood out. I also thought her introduction did a good job of grabbing the reader's interest. An example of good word choice was, "Santiago, is no repudiation of this fact of life." A part of her introduction that I liked was, "We take the baggage with us as we continue, working past everything we face as we climb the mountain of life."
IV. A weakness in the essay is probably the conclusion. I thought everything else was good, but I think it should end a little more general. After you talk about Santiago's hardships, I think you should talk more about hardships in general like the introduction did.
I. This essays thesis is Santiago facing hardships and having to overcome them. The thesis did engage me because it made me wonder what these hardships were.
ReplyDeleteII. Brett's second example was the strongest I liked the quote because it was short and straight to the point.
III. The essay has great word choice. Brett used creative words to make the essay exciting. It also makes it more enjoyable to read.
IV. I would say the weakest point of the essay is the ending. I agree with Tess, i think you should talk more about hardships like you did in the introduction. Great Job! :)
I. The thesis is about struggles in life and Santiago facing struggles. It was clear because it focused only on the topic: conflicts. It engaged me because she it did not tell you what the conflicts he faced were right away.
ReplyDeleteII. The second quote was the best because it really showed how hard it was for him to have a wounded hand. It also showed how frustrated he was that his hand was not healing.
III. This essay's word choice along with introductory paragraph really engage the reader. " Today in society, people encounter obstacles that are like roadblocks in their paths to achieving success, but we must overcome these hardships, and grow as better, stronger, and more enightened induviduals." I thought that even this sentence alone, the first sentence of the essay really makes the reader want to hear more.
IV. Overall, I thought the essay was really well written. The conclusion could have been broadened again to the idea of conflicts in everyday life like you did in the introduction (the triangle thing he showed us) but I thought it was really good! Nice job Brett! =)
I. Brett's intro is "In Ernest Hemingway's novella, The Old Man and the Sea, the old fisherman, Santiago, is no repudiation of this fact of life. Santiago faces hardships that he must overcome to succeed in a once in a life time oppurtunity, which changes him."
ReplyDeleteII. The best quote Brett had was her second one. She does a really good job integrating it and using it in the paragraph.
III. I think that the strongest parts of the essay are the introduction and the vocab. You can tell Brett took time to really develop what she wanted to say.
IV. Brett you have a really well written essay here, the only things I would recommend are to check your spelling, grammar, etc. and also add to your conclusion.
My 13 Words :)
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benevolent
calm
childish
cautious
enthusiastic
fascinated
harsh
remorseful
severe
complex
ambitious
intellegent